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When you attacked my world,
Your intentions were quite clear.
You intended to destroy us,
But now you reek of fear.

When I destroyed your armies,
My mind, for them, was not open.
And as I killed your captains,
My breath remained unbroken.

You expected many victims,
But alas, you received one, alone.
Your soldiers fell like dominoes.
My methods, to you, unknown.

And now you cower, drenched in sweat,
Fearing the death you know too well.
Without care, or a glint of mercy,
My blade rings Death's unholy bell.
I don't even.
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AscendantLiche Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Nice. The last line seems a bit archaic for the rest of the poem, but otherwise very emotive. Very well done, I'd say. Bravo.
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SiftStone Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks. It's funny though, the poems I put effort into suck, but the ones I'm just working off from Two Steps From Hell and Epic Music are good. :I
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AscendantLiche Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I find that if I put too much effort into crafting a poem, it ends up looking odd because each line was written seperately. However, if you do just write what comes to mind (Like I did on "The Carnival" and "Let the Reaper Man know") then it seems to come out much better.
Also music really is a great help. Especially if it matches the subject you are attempting to write a poem about.
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SiftStone Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
[link] I had this on repeat.
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AscendantLiche Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
That explains it.
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SiftStone Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Killing Necros don't get no better.
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ScarletMoon-98 Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This like a mini movie in my head...I LOVE IT! Its violent and dark and I LOVE IT!!!!
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SiftStone Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
And it loves you, too.
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ScarletMoon-98 Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yay X3
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StoryPony Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Jeebus, Sifty. This is worthy of a short film in and of itself, its literally as if it is the voice of a warriors cry. Super beautiful, Sifty.
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SiftStone Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
That means a lot to me, SP. Thank you.
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StoryPony Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Any time, buddy~
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vivere-sectam129 Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
beautiful man, just beautiful, I don't know how you think of this stuff
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SiftStone Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I don't. The voices tell me to do it.
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vivere-sectam129 Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
then keep listening to the voices.
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JoliGabrielle Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is beautiful, I may be some-what confused, but still dark beauty.
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SiftStone Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I dun gets. I was just typing up stuff.
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SufferingSquids Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Absolutely.
Fuckin'.
Beautiful.
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SiftStone Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Too much.

Two Steps.
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SufferingSquids Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Student Digital Artist
I like it.



No, I lied. I don't like it, Sifty. I'm sorry.


I LOVE IT.
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SiftStone Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
But this was relative poo. I don't see what to like.

Still, though. I'm glad you does.
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SufferingSquids Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Student Digital Artist
I just like how it's all battle-y and kill-y, not "i'm depressed" or "i love someone" or "i loved someone but now i'm depressed"
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SiftStone Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Ah. So you like how I didn't make myself a bitch?
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SufferingSquids Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Student Digital Artist
yes
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SiftStone Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
My body is solid.
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